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Psychology Personal Statement

I have chosen to study Psychology in order to fulfil a long-term interest in the complexity of human behaviour and psyche. I would like to study within Scotland because I will be able to gain some independence from the family yet, I will be close enough to visit easily.

From reading books at home, and regularly watching documentaries on the television, I have aided my growing interest in the field of psychology. I enjoy studying Psychology at college because it involves a wide variety of subjects such as: English, Biology, Chemistry and Maths, (4 of the 5 Highers I sat last year).

While in fourth year, I attended my work experience week at Bridge of Weir Leather Co. It proved to be a worthwhile week in that I received a valuable insight into laboratory work and how tests are carried out in the workplace.

I am currently assisting the teachers at Clippens School for the disabled in Linwood. I am in a class with young autistic children, and I find the work very enjoyable. I have gained a lot of experience in how autism affects behaviour and personality, and have made many new young friends.

I think one interesting application of psychology in business is advertising and the media. I find that the psychology behind some adverts can be very intriguing, and shows that the subject is very significant in today's media. I believe that psychology is an indispensable subject in that the wealth of information still to be uncovered will be of great usefulness.

This year I hope to achieve my target grades, (2 A's & 2 B's), and I am currently putting in a lot of effort in order to ensure these targets are met. Whenever I have free time I spend it playing the guitar or practising with my band. I have a keen interest in Martial Arts, and I have taken up Judo and Jeet Kune Do.

I have lived in and visited several different countries including New Zealand and Indonesia. This experience has resulted in a growing curiosity in other cultures. I believe that this has broadened my experience in this area and is likely to make me a more rounded and valuable employee.

I have no doubt that University will be a challenging, yet fulfilling part of my life, and hopefully will be the beginning of a successful career. I hope that this application indicates that I am a strong candidate for your University.

Comments

Unfortunately, this strikes as a very poor statement. The paragraphs are too short and don't expand on anything and most of the sentences start with 'I', meaning it doesn't flow very well. There are only very small mentions of academics, which should be the majority (approximately 2/3) of the PS. The candidate should comment on more specific things they learned/found interesting from their course and the relevant work experience they have, which would set them apart from other applicants.

If the sentences were made longer and the sentence structure was varied, this would give a much better impression - the candidate has only used simple sentences or compound sentences with simple connectives like 'and'.

I couldn't stop laughing while reading this ps. thank you

Review

I have chosen to study Psychology in order to fulfil a long-term interest in the complexity of human behaviour and psyche. this isn't at all original, and is very vague I would like to study within Scotland because I will be able to gain some independence from the family yet, I will be close enough to visit easily. the introduction should be about why you want to study the subject, not about the location of the university. It's not really necessary to mention at all

From reading books at home, and regularly watching documentaries on the television, I have aided my growing interest in the field of psychology. I enjoy studying Psychology at college because it involves a wide variety of subjects such as: English, Biology, Chemistry and Maths, (4 of the 5 Highers I sat last year). No need to just list subjects for the sake of it - they will be mentioned elsewhere on your UCAS form. Instead, you should write more about what specific parts of the course have been interesting and why, and maybe comment on some studies covered. A lot of documentaries are 'pop psychology' so you should be cautious mentioning them, unless you have something very specific to say about it and why you found it interesting. Also, subject titles should only be capitalised when saying (e.g.) 'A Level Psychology'

While in fourth year, I attended my work experience week at Bridge of Weir Leather Co. It isn't necessary to give the specific name of company you did work experience with It proved to be a worthwhile week in that I received a valuable insight into laboratory work and how tests are carried out in the workplace. the relevance to psychology isn't really there, as laboratory tests in a leather company would be very different to psychology experiments

I am currently assisting the teachers at Clippens School for the disabled in Linwood. Again, no need to be specific about the place. Just say 'a school for children with disabilities' I am in a class with young autistic children, and I find the work very enjoyable. I have gained a lot of experience in how autism affects behaviour and personality, and have made many new young friends. this is excellent experience that should be expanded on; for example, by discussing how autism affects a child's ability to learn, and how lessons differ to a mainstream school

I think one interesting application of psychology in business is advertising and the media. I find that the psychology behind some adverts can be very intriguing, and shows that the subject is very significant in today's media. I believe that psychology is an indispensable subject in that the wealth of information still to be uncovered will be of great usefulness. A far better way of showing an interest outside of lessons is to read books/studies outside of the curriculum. This isn't really specific to psychology - it would be more appropriate in a marketing PS. It isn't a good idea to show interest in an area of psychology that your universities do not cover at undergraduate

This year I hope to achieve my target grades, (2 A's & 2 B's), and I am currently putting in a lot of effort in order to ensure these targets are met. The predicted grades will be elsewhere in the PS, and as for the effort - the unis will assume that you are making an effort to achieve the best grades possible, so it's not necessary to tell them! Whenever I have free time I spend it playing the guitar or practising with my band. I have a keen interest in martial arts, and I have taken up Judo and Jeet Kune Do. It's good that the extra curricular activities are brief. However, skills learned from martial arts could be mentioned here as well

I have lived in and visited several different countries including New Zealand and Indonesia. This experience has resulted in a growing curiosity in other cultures. I believe that this has broadened my experience in this area and is likely to make me a more rounded and valuable employee. This is a university application, not a job application. While mentioning different cultures is good, it's only really going to be relevant to psychology admissions tutors by mentioning specific differences and maybe commenting on why these differences occur/if the differences are beneficial, at least in their country

I have no doubt that university 'university' should only be capitalised when naming a university, which wouldn't be a common thing to happen in a PS will be a challenging, yet fulfilling part of my life, and hopefully will be the beginning of a successful career. this sentence is incredibly cliched. The universities will assume you want to be there and it will be different from your education so far I hope that this application indicates that I am a strong candidate for your university. Rather than say 'I hope' - summarise why it DOES show you're a good candidate and why you want to do the course. Also, you are applying (generally) to several universities - don't address the admissions tutors directly, as it's not really directly to them and thus will appear insincere


Article by TSR User on Thursday 15 February 2018

Psychology Personal Statement

I desire an academic approach to the complex processes and interactions that determine human behaviour. I have an extremely analytical mind and objective view on life, and so am fascinated by subjects helping me gain a deeper understanding of the psychological factors that shape our actions and our lives.

The study of Sociology A-level has inspired my inquisitive personality by enabling me to analyse people and society from opposing perspectives, and has led me to develop an interest in the study of psychology. I have increasingly questioned the meaning behind unusual behaviour, such as aggression, and the significance of techniques we use, as humans as defence mechanisms, such as humour. In addition, the multitude of real-world applications of psychology has also aroused my interest. For example, the psychology of group processes can be applied to such contexts ranging from jury decisions, to political debate, to a group of friends' discussion.

Psychology is a subject that I will be suited to as I thrive on debate. I have become a more experienced debater through the analytical A-levels of English Literature, Sociology, History and Economics and through extra-curricular activities. I write articles for the local Village Magazine on topical village events, and I was a member of the school debating society. I often took part in internal debating competitions, many of which were often linked to psychological debates, such as the varying influence of peer groups upon young people's behaviour.

In the field of psychology my varied interests include altruism, the psychology of gender and crowd behaviour. Books that I have read that may aid my studies range from "The Freud Reader" (Edited by Simon Gay) and "The Private Life of the Brain" (Susan Greenfield). In addition, regularly reading the "Psychology Review" has also increased my thirst for the subject, as I have learnt of the dynamic nature of psychology, becoming informed of contemporary debates in psychology, such as the recent criticisms of Philip Zimbardo's famous Stanford prison experiment.

At present I am on a gap year in which I am volunteering full time in a residential accommodation for young people with disabilities to enable them to develop their independent living skills. This invaluable and rewarding opportunity will enable me to give back to a community that I have taken so much from. Furthermore, I intend to travel to either New Zealand or the northern states of the United States. This time will be employed as a chance to explore and study a different culture whilst aiding my preparation for the independence of university life.

My consistent academic achievements and dedication at school were extremely important to me, and were rewarded with the Sixth Form awards for Economics, English Literature and Overall Effort and Achievement. I was also proud to be the only student at my school to ever achieve an Advanced Extension Award (AEA), gaining a Distinction in Economics.

In addition, I took a full and active role in my school's community, and intend to do the same once at University. I acted as a form representative through much of the school, I conducted duties overseeing the main school when in the 6th Form, and I was a library assistant. I also enjoyed supporting school charity events and fundraising events, for example, I sold newspapers, and ribbons supporting National AIDS Day.

In my spare time I enjoy exploring my creative talents through a number of outlets. I am an enthusiastic Saxophone player; I have played in many orchestras and wind bands, and the most recent grade I have taken in Grade 5. I also thoroughly enjoy drama, and have taken part in many school and amateur dramatic performances throughout my school career. In addition, I enjoy abstract painting, and I took a photography course at college last year.

Above all, I believe I am a determined and disciplined student with very high, but realistic goals. I am excited about the immense opportunity of studying psychology at University, learning new skills, knowledge and a tolerance of the diversity of human nature that I will undoubtedly gain.

Comments

Overall, this is a rather good statement! The candidate clearly knows what psychology is about, by mentioning specific examples and has done some extra reading around the subject. Bits do need expanding on in some places and some parts are a little bit 'waffle-y' however.

The order is a bit odd - it would be better to order it 1. intro, 2. academics, 3. school responsibilities 4. extra-curricular activities/hobbies/gap year 5. conclusion

Review

I desire an academic approach to the complex processes and interactions that determine human behaviour. this is a rather cliched first sentence I have an extremely analytical mind and objective view on life, and so am fascinated over-used word in PSs! by subjects helping me gain a deeper understanding of the psychological factors that shape our actions and our lives. this could be expanded on to include some more specific things, or how the applicant became interested in psychology. Also, don't start two sentences in a row with 'I', as they don't flow well together

The study of Sociology A-level 'The study of' is repeated in this sentence, so this should be reworded, such as 'Doing A Level Sociology...' has inspired my inquisitive personality by enabling me this bit is rather wordy! Just saying that it 'has improved your ability...' or something to analyse people and society from opposing perspectives, and has led me to develop an interest in the study of psychology. I have increasingly questioned the meaning behind unusual behaviour, such as aggression, and the significance of techniques we use, as humans as defence mechanisms, such repetition of 'such' and 'as' should be avoided as humour. In addition, the multitude of real-world applications of psychology has also aroused my interest. For example, the psychology of group processes can be applied to such contexts ranging from jury decisions, to political debate, to a group of friends' discussion. don't tell the admissions tutors something they already know! Instead, say why it interests you, by giving more specific examples (e.g. names of researchers)

Psychology is a subject that I will be suited to as I thrive on debate. I have become a more experienced debater through the analytical A-levels of delete 'of' English Literature, Sociology, History and Economics and through extra-curricular activities. I write articles for the local village magazine on topical village events, and I was a member of the school debating society. I often took part in internal debating competitions, many of which were often linked to psychological debates, such as the varying influence of peer groups upon young people's behaviour. this paragraph is a bit off - it goes from subjects, to extra curricular activities to school activities. Try and keep bits the same together. Say how being analytical is good for psychology

In the field of psychology my varied interests include altruism, the psychology of gender and crowd behaviour. several interests have already been mentioned, I would leave this sentence out Books that I have read that may aid my studies range from "The Freud Reader" (edited by Simon Gay) and "The Private Life of the Brain" by Susan Greenfield. the applicant should mention what was learned/what was interesting in these? In addition, regularly reading the "Psychology Review" has also increased my thirst for the subject, as I have learnt of the dynamic nature of psychology, becoming informed of contemporary debates in psychology, such as the recent criticisms of Philip Zimbardo's famous Stanford prison experiment. I wouldn't say that all of the criticisms of the experiment are 'recent' and Zimbardo is a common study to mention, so it doesn't really set you apart from the crowd

At present I am on a gap year in which I am volunteering this wording is kind of awkward full time in  residential accommodation for young people with disabilities to enable them to develop their independent living skills. link to psychology? This invaluable and rewarding opportunity will enable me to give back to a community that I have taken so much from. cliched Furthermore, I intend to travel to either New Zealand or the northern states of the United States. This time will be employed this doesn't quite make sense as a chance to explore and study a different culture psychology link? Although the culture is unlikely to be too different from our own whilst aiding my preparation for the independence of university life.

My consistent academic achievements and dedication at school were extremely important to me, and were rewarded with the sixth form awards for Economics, English Literature and Overall Effort and Achievement. I was also proud to be the only student at my school to ever achieve an Advanced Extension Award (AEA), gaining a distinction in Economics. this is the sort of thing for the referee to mention

In addition, I took a full and active role in my school's community, and intend to do the same once at university. not necessary I acted as a form representative through much of the school, I conducted duties overseeing the main school when in the sixth form, and I was a library assistant. I also enjoyed supporting school charity events and fundraising events; for example, I sold newspapers, delete comma and ribbons supporting National AIDS Day. don't start too many sentences in a row with 'I', as it doesn't flow well

In my spare time I enjoy exploring my creative talents through a number of outlets. kind of informal I am an enthusiastic saxophone player; I have played in many orchestras and wind bands, no comma and the most recent grade I have taken in Grade 5. this is a bit wordy - it would be better to just say 'and have completed Grade 5 I also thoroughly enjoy drama, and have taken part in many school and amateur dramatic performances throughout my school career. In addition, I enjoy abstract painting, and I took a photography course at college last year.

Above all, I believe I am a determined and disciplined student with very high, but realistic goals. I am excited about the immense opportunity of studying psychology at university, learning new skills, knowledge and a tolerance of the diversity of human nature that I will undoubtedly gain. the conclusion needs to be more specific to the degree and say why the applicant is a good candidate for the course


Article by TSR User on Thursday 15 February 2018

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